tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post4806025791622768461..comments2024-03-20T16:46:13.343-04:00Comments on Marly Youmans / The Palace at 2:00 a.m. / poems, stories, novels: You Asked, no. 12: Basket of lightMarly Youmanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-64067127097545699202016-02-17T10:36:57.288-05:002016-02-17T10:36:57.288-05:00Thank you, Ms. Mary, for the very first poetic res...Thank you, Ms. Mary, for the very first poetic response (I think!) to a blog post of mine, and the sight and sound of Cat batting around my words. Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-15071691667600285312016-02-17T10:12:00.840-05:002016-02-17T10:12:00.840-05:00Why I love your response to my question about poet...<br />Why I love your response to my question about poetic form <br />for Marly Youmans<br /><br />I love your shapely verbal basket filling with light<br />into which leaps the swiftly metered cat<br />come in from the dappled borderlands<br />between written word and song.<br /><br />Swelling the bright interstices<br />he coils and curls until he plaits<br />a second basket plush with purr.<brHow to contact Mary: marybullington53@gmail.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08174581825078147922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-81392698472093885152016-02-16T17:03:15.395-05:002016-02-16T17:03:15.395-05:00Thank you for the poem, so different from the last...Thank you for the poem, so different from the last one. You know, I don't mind a bit--sonnets are welcome! People don't often leave poems, but you're not the first. Your rhymes in this one are very different from the last, and the subject, narrative shape, and punctuation as well. I take it this one was much more recent.<br /><br />Surely you have informed yourself by the writing of Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-18533221352773344742016-02-16T16:49:13.890-05:002016-02-16T16:49:13.890-05:00I don't believe you one bit!I don't believe you one bit!Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-72384145181485956322016-02-16T10:15:53.930-05:002016-02-16T10:15:53.930-05:00Simpler language, a tendency towards narrative, a ...Simpler language, a tendency towards narrative, a growing desire to speak with an English tone of voice. This one's rather derivative and spoilt by over-compression and obscurity in lines eleven and twelve. So why didn't I re-write them? Feebly I offer: they meant something to me at the time and, God forgive me, the subject's personal.<br /><br />Mind you I'm glad you did walk Roderick Robinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16828395545197001637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-4182265032902551872016-02-16T10:05:27.800-05:002016-02-16T10:05:27.800-05:00Yes, well, the devil asked me to do it! Her name i...Yes, well, the devil asked me to do it! Her name is Mary!How to contact Mary: marybullington53@gmail.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08174581825078147922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-65778794218509171492016-02-16T07:32:36.293-05:002016-02-16T07:32:36.293-05:00Yes, well, Mary asked me to do it! The original re...Yes, well, Mary asked me to do it! The original response had no poem and no discussion of rhyme in a poem. It is not my bent to walk-through poems, especially my own. You won't see me making a habit of it!<br /><br />Interesting how your poem hews so closely to the iambic (with a couple of variants) and yet the word choice carries the jolting, particularly in the developed-by-parallelism Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-38983243634026180622016-02-16T07:12:29.562-05:002016-02-16T07:12:29.562-05:00It's so strange that in our day so many writer...It's so strange that in our day so many writers think rhyme is constraining, when it is in fact a force for freedom.Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-88416016455630730842016-02-16T04:07:46.274-05:002016-02-16T04:07:46.274-05:00Whoops! "don't" not "doesn'...Whoops! "don't" not "doesn't".Roderick Robinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16828395545197001637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-50978551090210711282016-02-16T04:01:59.715-05:002016-02-16T04:01:59.715-05:00Great to see someone celebrating Shakespearean son...Great to see someone celebrating Shakespearean sonnets in this day and age. Without them I'd never have been tempted to versify. The great thing is the structure is so tightly defined that the writer is there out on a limb, exposed to even the most glancing critic. Anyone can see whether the sonnet's lousy or not and here's a lousy one I prepared earlier. About the tenth I ever tried,Roderick Robinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16828395545197001637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-55264761965842767602016-02-16T00:44:42.496-05:002016-02-16T00:44:42.496-05:00"Rhyme is magic. Magic! Rhyme whirls the poet...<i>"Rhyme is magic. Magic! Rhyme whirls the poet to an unexpected place. Rhyme tosses the poet away from any obsessions with the self. It insists that allegiance is not to oneself but to the poem, and to the making of new sense from the swirl of rhyme sounds generated by the opening lines. Thus rhyme demands a certain self-forgetfulness...."</i><br /><br />What a great way to put it. ItJeffhttp://www.quidplura.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-52794322018217447302016-02-15T10:39:04.411-05:002016-02-15T10:39:04.411-05:00Oh, my, you have traveled again! See you there. An...Oh, my, you have traveled again! See you there. And thanks.Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11539948.post-32680714700839012402016-02-15T10:23:55.542-05:002016-02-15T10:23:55.542-05:00Brava! As someone who loves formal elements of poe...Brava! As someone who loves formal elements of poetry, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this posting. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. BTW, I have changed my blogging address to Beyond Walden Pond; you are, of course, invited to visit often.<br />http://beyondwaldenpond.blogspot.com/RTDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17113953356514605424noreply@blogger.com